hemmed within the shell
of blackness, complete blackness
I see silent light
like a hermit's solitude
hovering in a cocoon
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This is my first attempt at Tanka.
Like Haiku, it is also a Japanese form of poetry but a lot older in terms of origin. It has five lines extending up to 31 syllables in a pattern of 5-7-5-7-7.
To learn something new on your own, is happiness.
I've just got back into writing and your work is inspiring...really beautiful stuff <3
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ReplyDeleteYay! Thank you, Shruti :*
DeleteBeautiful. Hermit. Cocoon. Blackness. Solitude. <3
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DeleteOh wow! How beautiful was that! :)
ReplyDeleteTanka eh? Will try out. Thank you for letting me know what it is :)
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Yes, do write one. :)
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DeleteBeautiful attempt to write a tanka Mirage ... Welcome at Carpe Diem Mirage I hope to read more poems written by you. By the way I am your host at Carpe Diem.
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DeleteLoved this Tanka, Vinati:)
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Breathtakingly beautiful! Thank you!
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DeleteI'm glad you liked my first attempt.
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Thanks a bunch Red.
Wow this is beautiful. I am trying to learn more and more about poetry and beautiful poems like this really help me :)
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